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Ray started walking toward the crystal.
Although he was kind, he had a cautious side when it came to the unknown. He didn't know anyone here, so even though they shared their story, he didn't believe them yet. He took careful steps forward.
Ray took a deep breath and placed his hand on the crystal.
Name: Ray Valehart
Job: Commoner (A person dragged into another world)
Rank: 0
Level: 1
STR: 5
AGI: 5
VIT: 5
DEX: 5
INT: 5
The hall fell silent as everyone looked at his status. Suddenly, John broke the silence.
Ray simply shook his head and sighed.
Then, something unexpected happened—the king did something no one imagined.
"Mr. Ray, I'm deeply sorry for bringing you into this world," the king said, bowing low.
Everyone was stunned by the king's action. The ministers quickly objected.
"Your Majesty, please don't bow to him," they said, glaring at Ray with disdain.
Noticing all eyes on him, Ray replied calmly,
"Your Majesty, please don't bow to me. I'm not worthy of it."
"Even so," the king said, "the previous queen mother taught me this: whether you are a king, a commoner, or anyone else, if you are wrong—you must apologize."
"It may be rude of me to say this," Ray added tiredly, "but I still want to. The previous queen was truly wise, and above all, she seemed like a very kind mother."
Thinking of his own family, Ray sighed again.
"Your Majesty, may I request something? I'm a bit tired," he said, his voice soft.
The king looked at Ray and his status, then sighed as well.
"Very well. Let us conclude this event. Servants, please guide our heroes to their rooms."
All the heroes followed the servants to their assigned chambers.
When the servant showed Ray to his private room, he finally took a deep breath of relief. As he entered, something flickered in his vision.
A few minutes earlier, when Ray had touched the crystal:
> [You are entering another universe. This universe's power system differs from yours.]
> [Your native world has begun evolving. You now have access to the Sole Record.]
> [This world is compatible—you can receive help through the Sole Record.]
> [You have gained the passive skill: Assistant AI. It will help you understand your native world's power system.]
Ray kept reading these messages again and again, trying to process it all.